Description and script of the plot in detail

I have decided to add in different scenes and to go through the plot in detail. The opening of the scene starts off with our villain 'Nazo' walking down the street to get to the house which he has to break into to gather certain intel for his upcoming plans of destruction, while he's walking our hero 'Max' is narrating the scene explaining why Nazo is so dangerous (see previous posts for the script for the narration scene) When max stops talking, Nazo points a gun at the henchman guarding the house, the henchman says "What do you want, don't shoot", Nazo just laughs and knocks the henchman out with the end of the gun. Nazo then breaks into the house and frantically looks for the documents which he is looking for, he eventually finds them on the floor under the sofa . When Nazo gets up max is standing close behind him and says, " Its over Nazo, we know what your up to!". The screen quickly blacks out and the text says three weeks earlier, the scene then cuts to Max training in his room doing press ups, sit ups etc ( I thought it would be clever to use ellipsis on this section) Max then gets an urgent phone call on his mobile, the caller says " Max, we have information that Nazo is going to strike again, we need you to take him out, do you understand?" Max bluntly says "Yeah, im on it". Then the opening credits start rolling, end of opening scene.